A warm
spring day; sun’s out, a light breeze blowing. The weather calls for a fun day
outside, basking in the sun. Imagine sitting or lying in the grass, gazing up
at the blue skies…while being a few feet away from airplanes in the sky – it’s
amazing, speaking from experience! Gravelly Point Park, located in Arlington,
Virginia, is exactly where one can enjoy a pleasant day watching planes as they
take-off and land. This recreation spot is conveniently located a few miles
away from downtown D.C. – allowing both local residents, as well as visiting
tourists, to access the Park.
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I love how I felt like I was right there, laying in a field experiencing this even at 11pm ! Thank you for the smiles
ReplyDeleteThis essay has great details and it makes me want to go to that park.
ReplyDeleteThe descriptive language in the beginning of the blog is amazing. It definitely pulls a reader in and makes them want to know more. I agree with Hayley, I felt like I was there!
ReplyDeleteA picture could have really improved the blog, and given a reference point for your awesome description. Overall, though, very nice work! I would love to visit this place!
I like the vivid imagery in the beginning. Like everyone else, it made me feel like i was there, relaxing and being care-free.
ReplyDeleteI think you should have talked more about what you did there that made it so special besides watching airplanes fly by. Did your family go there with you? Did you bring your closest friends on summer days? Small things like that would have helped I think.
Overall, it was a great read and I hope one day to go there!
I like your idea but I feel that your repition of the words sky and sun made it a bit choppy. You could throw is words like "flying through the atmosphere" and "laying in the sunlight".
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I really enjoyed how you began with a basic idea and expaneded into what made you appreciate the given place. This park sounds wonderful, well done!
ReplyDeleteI enjoy watching airplanes very much and this is a place I'll definitely keep in the back of my head to check out. I think your use of descriptive text really helps me in visualizing what your try to convey.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I can think of for you to add to improve this is perhaps some history on the airport itself. Other than that great job!
I would love to visit this place, it sounds incredibly relaxing and enjoyable. I loved your detailed descriptions, but I am a visual person so I would have liked to see a photo to enhance the scene you have set. You did a great job though!
ReplyDeleteI like the imagery description of your post! I can imagine being there. However, you could have added sources to give your post is relevant.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you made the park come to life. while reading this i felt that i was in the park.
ReplyDeleteYou could talk more about its historical significant and what the park means to you personally and for other people in the community.
I feel like your blog placed the reader in the park with the strong descriptive words along with your personal experience of the park. I thought this was the strong part of this post.
ReplyDeleteIf you could improve this, I would suggest adding a nice picture of the park to allow the reader to use the descriptive words along with the picture, so that they can imagine themselves there. Nice job!
This is a very vivid description of the place that matters to you, and you managed to provide a lot of detail within a short assignment. I was kind of wondering about how culturally significant this place is for others though.
ReplyDeleteI liked the picture that you painted in this blog! As I read it, I definitely felt like I was almost there, sounds really awesome and relaxing! I didn't really feel the cultural significance or community connection as much as a personal connection but sounds like a really cool place.
ReplyDeleteI felt like I was there when I was reading this post, lying on the grass and watching the airplanes. It was a very vivid post and I enjoyed reading it a lot! I agree that a picture would have been helpful though, so I could really visualize the park.
ReplyDeletei like the visual language used i just wish there was a picture to go along with it
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